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Writing a Narrative about Overcoming a Challenge

Read the summary of the story Henrique wrote.

The soldiers walked through the rain as they approached the canyon. They’d been traveling for days to reach the dragon’s lair. Finally they arrived. Then the dragon approached, and it roared. Yet, the soldiers faced off with the dragon, despite the noise.

Which is the best critique explaining why Henrique should revise the summary?

Henrique needs to add some descriptive language to make the story come alive.
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I work at the community garden.

Which revision most improves the sentence by adding description?

The mixed aroma of spicy garlic and sweet roses tickles my nose when I work at the community garden.
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Returning home from the trip, we peeled off our sodden coats, dropped all of our suitcases on the floor, and headed for the kitchen in the back.

Which part of the sentence uses description to hold the reader’s interest?

we peeled off our sodden coats
What should a writer plan to include in the end of a narrative essay? Check all that apply.
-a reflection on what was learned
-a discussion about how the experience caused change
Read the passage that Gabriel wrote for his narrative essay.

Once we arrived at the local pool, I looked around to see who else was there. Normally, I would have found the kids frolicking and splashing in the water hilarious, but not today. They were cute, but the fact that they were half my age and swimming around like so many ducks just made me feel worse.

“You nervous?” my mom asked.

I swallowed the lump in my throat. “Not really,” I mumbled, trying to hide my shaking hands in my pockets.

I don’t think I fooled my mom, but she didn’t comment on the fact that I looked a little green. Instead, she tried to encourage me, saying, “Well, I think it’s really impressive that you’re going to confront your fear of water and learn to swim.”

What is the most likely reason Gabriel chose to write his essay with this point of view?

Since a narrative essay tells a story about the writer’s life, it is most effective to tell the story from the writer’s point of view.
Which sentence most needs to be revised because its description is too vague?
We had to walk up several flights of stairs to get there.
When planning a narrative essay, the writer should order events so that the _____ is developed in the middle of the essay.
I practiced regularly until the day came when I was able to consistently hit the ball.
When planning his narrative essay, should Noam include a section about how his experience affected him?
Yes, he should include at the end of the essay information about what he learned and if it changed him.